Claudia's Response to Lena's Poems

Claudia Blaize: Response to Bad Dream & Intoxication by Nature-Lena Redding
Bad Dream:
A very sad poem of the loss of the writer’s best friend who was also her first love. I felt that you had actually experienced this death as your descriptions of his body as it was being destroyed by cancer were quite accurate. I liked many of your lines, esp.,”Tired of crying from the eyes that betray me” and “His sinking inward smile thinning out”, and “His corpse like a masquerade mannequin”. You made me feel your pain and loss. I did get a bit of a jolt when you wrote about climbing into the coffin with his dead body. Wasn’t sure if it was real or metaphorical in nature.

Intoxication by Nature:
This poem also speaks about love, but not of a person, of mother nature and all she has to offer. Perhaps this was written after your first love died as you write,”Decade and a half of solitude resolved with peace within and companionship with nature”. Was nature a solace after experiencing that human loss? You write that you “love” and “trust” it completely. Maybe it is that nature cannot let you down as relationships with people can. I liked the line,”Brightness seeps throughout the dark green canopies”. Good visualization. I didn’t understand the last line, so would need clarification of what you meant.
Two beautiful poems Lena.
Thanks-Claudia