Melda's critique of "On the Eve of His Departure"

I love how easy your story is to read. You made sure to start a new paragraph every time another person was speaking. Also we can tell that the main character, Mark, truly cares about Justine. For example, he wonders whether or not Justine met his parents. Mark seems to want to take the relationship to the next level since he wants her to meet his parents. Also, towards the end of the story, Mark brings Justine water, beer, and basically whatever she wants. Mark hates to say goodbye to Justine and decides that he will do that last. On the other hand, your story has no conflict. I would have liked to see how the characters act when they are apart or when they are saying goodbye to each other.