Patrick's response to Liz's story "Josie"

I liked this story very much, even though it was sad and shocking at the end. I thought the writer did a very good job of portraying the family. The reader got a strong sense of the family dynamic that was going on. The dialogue works well throughout and its very tight and crisp. I like how the story started with dialogue and then proceeded to get into the plot line, she mixed the dialogue and story line very well, she had a good balance there. The reader left me wanting to know more though. She got me really engaged and interested and I want to know what happens next. How are kyle, Jayme and Cayden going to deal with the the loss of Josie. So, to me it was almost like the story was a prelude into a much bigger story. I think this story has a lot of potential and promise, but I think the real story lies in what will happen next. There is a lot of options open for her as to what she could do with it. I think it would be neat if she centered it strictly around Kyle and Jamie and how they are dealing with the changes. She could have the man driving the car that killed Josie get off on the charges and because of that Jayme and Kyle have to see him around town, like when they are out to eat and at the grocery store.
But overall I liked the story and I look forward to reading Liz's next submission.