Melda's Critique of "An Autumn Dream" by Ayisha Brathwaite

I like the beautiful fall imagery that we get in the beginning of the story. For example, you state, "The branches were laden with leaves of browns, red, yellows and oranges, falling down like a gentle rain onto the worn ground." It gets the reader involved and interested in the story. Also, I believe your story is easy to relate to. Almost all of us had some kind of forbidden crush that wondered into our dreams once in a while. However, I believe you could have developed the story or the dream better if you described some specific memories the two characters had together. That way we could understand the character relationship better.