Liz's Response to Josh's Story

Response to Josh Nuckolls’ “Don’t Call it a Comeback”
This was a story about Danny Robbins, a fighter who lost his career as a pro MMA fighter. All of his possessions were about to be taken away from him and he resorted to his old life of “ghetto crime” to support his family. During the robbery of a jewelry store he was shot and died a few hours later, but not before stuffing a valuable diamond in his son’s teddy bear to keep his family financially secure.
I thought this was an interesting story. It was enjoyable to read and also believable. I liked the dialogue and conversations between the characters in the story because it really gave the reader a sense of who these people are and how they act. I also liked how you showed that, even though Danny had a rough exterior, he still had compassion and cared about his kids. I thought the fact that he didn’t want his kids to know what he was doing to support them and that he stashed the diamond was really showing to his true character. Some parts that confused me were some of the dialogue paragraphs: i.e. when the family is talking and Joe asks where the cars went, the paragraph gets confusing between dialogue and the narrator. I was also confused as to where the wife and kids were going to stay if everything was being taken away from them and how the kids would not know what was going on if they went home and everything was gone? In all, I enjoyed this story.