Scott's critique of Pat's "On the Eve of His Departue"

Response:
This story takes place during the last night of Mark's stay in Portland. He is going back home in the East where he plans to stay and not return to Oregon. Most of the story utilizes conversation between two central characters; Mark and Justine. "On the Eve..." opens to Mark searching for Justine in her home, he floats around the home from the library and to the balcony, reminiscing of memories from the past along the way. The story ends with Mark letting Justine know he will wake her in the morning.

Critique:

I feel that Pat's story was great, it had a very nice flow to it which didn't drag on. The transition from one subject to another, i.e. Mark heading to the balcony, to his night of drinking, smoking, and goodbyes, back to the balcony setting, worked really well also. In regards to transition, Pat also did a good job on switching back and forth between dialogue and prose. One of my big issues with the story was the ending, it didn't end on a high or low note, it just kind of, ended. I didn't have too many issues to say on the negative side, kudos.