Melda's response to Liz Wenrich "Josie"

I like how you set up your story so that we can see how perfect this family is. The family consists of loving parents and two kids who all get along perfectly. Your story illustrates that nobody is perfect because their world gets crushed when they find out that Josie died in the car accident. One way you could improve your story is to talk more about Josie and her daily habits, her likes/dislikes, etc. because, after all, your story's title is "Josie."