BJ's Response to Tara's Poem

Tara's poem was dark and mysterious. It definitely represented the mind of someone "torn apart" but at the same time i feel like the narrarator was still half asleep. It reminded me of awaking from a terrible dream that you vaguely remember and then realizing that it was not real. except in this case she is relieved to find she is not drowning "in a flood of tears" and that everything will be okay. Her rhythm was very calming and soothing. The flow reminded me of a lullaby or a bedtime story. I like the adjectives used. My constructive critism would be to lose a few of the words to make her lines metaphors.They would be more powerful that way. Example: I'm in a dawn of darkeness" could become " I am the dawn of darkness." Cause i saw it that way, just wanted to feel it that way. other than that elaborate on the blood and the muscles and the cries. I wanted to hear more of those experiences. But overall i enjoyed this. I loved it rather. Loved the darkness with a spot of light.