Sean Brodie's Response to Sabrina's Story "Treehuggers"

Sabrina's Story Treehuggers is about a possibly young man named Scott and his possible girlfriend or friend Dina, with his two younger siblings Ethan and Maddie, who had traveled two hundred miles to a Treehuggers Music Festival, which is like Woodstock 1969 in West Virginia to sell Jello-shots to hippies to make back the money they had lost by spending on the ingredients, tickets for the festival, and hoping to gain profit. Ethan and Maddie ran off to the festival to have fun, while Scott and Dina remained at their campsite try to sell Jello-shots, but were having bad luck. Maddie met a new friend who is the daughter of the owner of the festival. Scott and Dina decided to give Ethan a shot of trying to sell Jello-Shots since they only sold one for half the price. Ethan did so and came back with an empty Zip-Lock bag and sold ten Jello-shots for ten dollars. Scott and Dina were surprised, so they gave him some more Jello-shots and he came back with thirty dollars. The two asked how he managed to sell them. Ethan replied, that he just walk up to people and asked them if they want any, and he sold them. Sometime later, Ethan came back empty handed and told Scott and Dina that a man took his bag of Jello-Shots. The man came to their campsite in his four-wheeler ATV, who was the owner of the festival and Maddie's friend's father. He was upset that Scott and Dina let a child sell alcohol to people on his property and kick them out of the festival and told them to come back next year. Scott told Ethan it wasn't his fault, it was his and Dina, so they packed up their stuff and Ethan went to get Maddie so they can return home. They two kids were disappointed that they had to leave two days earlier than they had anticipated. In the end, Ethan lighten up the mood by telling Scott and Dina that he made more money than they did, and they laugh at the irony of it. They knew their situation could had been a lot worst, and vowed to never speak about it again. Then they played a song and the lyrics went like this, "Cross my heart and hope to die, I was just hanging out with the other guys,yeh-yeh yeh-yeh yeh-yeh yeh, singing, "Thank you, for a real good time!"

I really enjoyed this story and wouldn't change anything about it except I would suggest maybe giving an idea on how old Scott and Dina are. I believe they’re in their early 20's, for other readers to get an idea, and I would suggest when the owner came to lecture Scott and Dina, that he should say, "I'll let you go this time, but next time if I catch you letting a child sell Alcohol again, I will call the police." I really like how you wrote this story and the idea of it. It reminds me of the college days and the main characters of the story went to a WoodStock festival in 1969 or 70s and were selling the good stuff. It feels like to me it was a real experience that had happen to somebody or it was from a comedy movie. Great Job!