BJ,
I really like this poem, i can definately relate to a lot of your lines.
"It used to be just you, me"
"A glass of wine and an episode of King of Queens."
Haha me and my ex boyfriend did something like that.
"You stayed out in the streets with your so called boys,"
"And the only things that made you smile were a drink and a joint."
I know exactly how you feel.
Your poem flows well and the lines you rhymed really emphasized the poems meaning, but i like how you didn't rhyme eery line, which sometimes i have a problem doing.
"You said you would never hurt me but that was a lie,"
"But for some strange reason i was more than willing to let you try."
It seems like a typical love story when the relationship first starts things are great and you fall hard for him until he starts showing his true colors like those two lines. I like how you put in there that you were helping him pay for shit when he didn't have a job.
I look foward to saying more about this in class!
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