claudia

Brief Summary of the story:
Valerie writes of identical twin sisters who are caught up in the murder of their parents. One of them, Elle, for all intents and purposes is the perpetrator. The ending has the ubiquitous plot twist of mistaken identity when the innocent twin takes the rap for the guilty one.

Responses:
I enjoyed the build up with all of the detailed description as to how Sonya and the aunt were feeling. Valerie really conveyed the sadness the aunt felt and how kind and caring both she and the uncle were. (See above comments in text)
I think the story could be condensed in revision, (easy for me to say as I have yet to start my story), but maybe leave out the little boys since they don’t seem to advance the plot line.
Overall, I enjoyed Valerie’s story.
Thanks,
Claudia Blaize