Takira's Response to Kathleen

I loved your story. The opening paragraph was funny and interesting. It made me want to read the rest of the story. Brian kept me laughing with his personality and the way he thought about things. I liked that you used something as simple as a tree for inspiration and the one piece of art that Brian would finish. I like the part where Brian lost his job. It reminded me of a movie scene where the person who is getting fired always says something irrelevant to the conversation out of wrong assumptions. My only problem with the story was that I wasn’t really sure what Brian’s routine was. I couldn’t figure out if what he did when he got in the house was an everyday thing or just that day. Otherwise I loved the story and look forward to reading more.