I really love the poem 'Reflections' it has strong, vibrant, imagry and a sense of peace and beauty while potraying a sense of power and movement. Overall the poem is very well structured.
I personally, would only make a few small changes in wording (taking out 'and' from line three, stanza two and removing 'it's' from line four, stanza two). However, I think that the last stanza could be expanded to include more imagry to fit the rest of the poem.
It may seem odd, but the flow of this poem makes me think of silk.
The poem 'Revolutions' has a lot of powerful imagry, it makes me feel trapped in a loud, noisy, confining city. The only thing that I might change about the poem was the wording of the last stanza. Is it differnt on purpose or not? If there is no reason for the wording to be different, it could be easily adjusted to fit the flow of the poem.
Example:
The stars
where have they gone?
The sky
ate them up
Even the moonlight
is fading now
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