Patrick's resopnse to Saira's story

I really enjoyed reading this story. It was very well written and had a good story line going throughout. The central character development was very good. The reader gets a very strong sense of who ashley is and what she ultimately wants. Of course one can't help but feel sad and emotional for ashley, but that's how some story's are and in this case it's not a bad thing. One gets the sense that ashley's son is going to turn out ok. I like how the writer decided to end the story where she did, it definitely makes you ask yourself some questions. However i think extending it would also work in this case. The writer goes into so much detail about the alienation alshley feels towards her family, that one really wants to know how they will react to her situation. So maybe the writer could keep those things in mind if she decides to keep working on it. But overall I really enjoyed!