Wednesday, September 23, 2009

Melda's Review of “REVOLUTIONS” BY BECCA

This poem is about a person who is lost in a big city and is not used to the urban vibe.
I like all the descriptions of the city life. For example, you state, “cars whirling by skyscrapers…[and]….flashing neon lights.” Also, I like the last stanza because it illustrates that the city is filled with smog and the stars are not visible. You described this very sarcastically through saying, “the sky ate [the stars] up.” You could improve your poem by braking the middle stanza into 2 stanzas and describing the dangerous city even more.

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