“Photogratastrophe”
The opening paragraph has good description and brings the reader into the story. It’s a cute story and the humor makes it engaging. The ending with the grandmother is a nice finish. The exposition takes over, though, and the story loses some of the reader’s interest because it focuses on telling rather than showing. Listing descriptions of the characters’ appearance in the second paragraph of the story is particularly detrimental to getting the reader involved, as there doesn’t really seem to be a point to them. Descriptions and dialogue need to be incorporated into the story while moving the plot along.
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