Melda's Review of “SELF PORTRAIT” BY KATHLEEN DEADY

I like how Brian grew through your story. He was a lazy character who never completed anything successfully in his whole life, but at the end, he gets fired which teaches him a life lesson and gets him moving. For the first time he actually completes the tree painting. Also, I like how you literally compared the tree to Brian and left us off knowing that the character grew and he would do something good with his life. However, I feel as if you got so carried away with descriptions in the first page of your story that it got the reader confused. Try to focus only on describing crucial things.