The story of the churchies is about a group of girls who live in a small town and spend their days doing good in the community, participating in activities at church, schoool, work, and elsewhere. Eventually they get frustrated because they have not recieved any reward for their efforts, and they decide to rob the local bank and take money to start a new life in Costa Rica.

I think the story has an interesting premisis, seventeen years old who have worked to be 'good' all their lives deciding to commit a felony and rob a bank. The story does a good job of setting up the girls as a group and a unity, and they even keep their 'good girl' identity of 'The Churchies' while they are robbing the bank and fleeing the country.

One thing that bothers me about the story is the lack of characters. I don't know how many girls are in this group untill later in the story, and I don't have anything at all to set these girls as individuals. I think for this story to work it's important to give the girls a sense of some identity, even if the sense of group is stronger. I think some dialouge between the girls, perhaps while they are making their plans would give a good sense of how they think.I also can't imagine none of them being in distress on the plane ride, since thats probably when the reality of what they did would set it.

This story has a really good premise, and an interesting concept, but more character development is needed to really bring it to life.