heidi's response to Josh's story

“Don’t Call It a Comeback” Right off the back, the author gets the reader involved in the story and wanting to know what is going to happen. The dialogue helps develop the story, as well as the characters, and seems believable. The use of dialect is good; but, in a way, it also feels a bit cliché. Nevertheless, the story moves along and, even though it is rather predictable, it still keeps the reader reading. The ending would be more effective if it were more developed. The way it is now has a sense of being hurried, so further details about Danny dying and Natasha finding the diamond would make it more interesting.