Tuesday, September 29, 2009

Critique: "Bad Dream" and "Intoxication by Nature" by Lena Redding

"Bad Dream"
This is an interesting poem; there is a nice flow of words and lines throughout. The author does a nice job of exposing the boy's illness without losing the poetic feel. I don't particularly agree/understand when the narrator gets into the coffin; in a whole, I don't think those lines fit with the realism of the beginning.

"Intoxication by Nature"
I like the way you describe nature/ mother earth. I especially enjoy the lines, "You embellish the bottom floors with a collage of flowers, mosses, ferns, and bushes. You adorn me the gift of sight to enjoy your beauty." However, I get lost toward the end of the poem, I pick up the sense that nature strikes back; "Your bright violent colors strike me to the point of no return... ...While weeping trees lash out on my face."

I liked the author's work overall, except I think the endings could be done differently.



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