Melda's Review of Katie Kluttz's story

I like that your story is very simple, and you describe "The Churchies" very well. Also the conflict of the story is clear when you state, "The feeling that they never really receive anything for their work they do for the community. That they weren't going to be able to go to their school of choice because of money…..no way to get what they wanted." On the other hand, you do not state whether or not the girls will attend the school of choice. You state that they run away to paradise but what about college? Not all of the conflicts are resolved if they don’t end up going to college.