Response to Phototastrophe by Adam Kite

Photogratastrophe by Adam Kite

This story was about a family that goes to get a picture taken as a gift for their grandmother. The family is supposed to be posing as if they were perfect, just smiling like normal people would. But they are not perfect and the kids ruin numerous attempts to take a normal picture.

I could relate to this story since when Christmas card time comes around, there is usually one person not looking good in every picture. I thought in the beginning paragraph the sentence that said “The boredom hung like a thick haze throughout the entire store…” was a good description. You also gave good descriptions of the people mentioned in the story and I could get a good feel as to who you were talking about. But I also thought you got almost too detailed when you talked about all the pictures being taken and having the family looking at every one with the same glares being sent by the parents. Overall, I thought you did a good job!