heidi's response to Liz's story

“Josie”
The author does a good job of creating tension at the beginning of the story and setting the reader up for something bad to happen because the story starts off in such an idealistic setting. It almost felt like watching a movie where one is just waiting for the tragedy to happen. The descriptions and dialogue seem realistic and set a believable tone to the story. The line “face was so scrunched that it resembled that of a bull dog” was particularly good at giving a visual. Dialogue and description generally worked to move the story along and seemed to have purpose. The one aspect that was lacking was a satisfying conclusion. It seemed like there needed to be more revelation of the impact the child’s death had on the parents, particularly Kyle.