Photogratasophe is the story of a family of thirteen, who goes to get a family portrait of the 'kids' to make a cloth/blanket portrait to give as a gift to the grandmother for Christmas. The 'kids', varying in ages from toddler to early tweenties, cause a ruckus disrupting the photo and annoying their other family members but resulting in a memorable 'true' picture for grandmom.
What I like about the story is the antics between the cousins. They really show a connection between them as a group.I think that dialouge could be used to strengthen the story as a whole. Perhaps while they are waiting for the photographer, or during the goofing around with the picture. I also would like to know a little more about the narrator. I enjoyed listening to his discriptions of his family members and their actions, I really got a laugh out of those, however, the only thing that I definatively know about the narrator is his height and that they have a sister.
Overall I think there is a lot of good stuff in this story, but it could really use a lot of dialouge to give it more depth.
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