critique of the churchies by Katie Klutz

Critique by Claudia Blaize
Brief Summary: The Churchies by Katie Klutz
Katie wrote a fun story about four, 17 y.o. “good girls” who were called “Churchies” due to the kind deeds they did for others. They came from decent hard-working families who lived in a small town in Jackson County. They had the same dream of going to expensive colleges and living in Costa Rica. The plot revolved around the girls feelings of not being compensated for their hard work, so they broke the trust of the townspeople and robbed the local bank in order to fulfill their dreams. Response:
The story moved along quickly and I liked the establishment of routines to form the girls’ characters. You tried to make them likeable thieves by having them give back some of the money to the church and their families. I liked the use of irony as the girls involved the church in their plot to rob the bank.
Areas for revision:
Would like to know the names of the girls, more character development.
Let the reader decide at the end if they were justified in what they did.
Use dialogue instead of narrative to move the plot along.